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The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005.

The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005.
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The given table illustrates the changes in the expanse of duty in Sweden, the USA,Korea,
Japan
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 and Turkey by the percentage of GDP from 1975 to 2005.
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, the lowest percentage between countries was in
Japan
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, nearly till the end of the period it grew to 2 palaces.
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, in the
last
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 year, three countries were around in the same position. In the first 2 years, Sweden occupied the first positions (46%,47%).Following, Korea in 1975 earned apparently 15%,but after ten years it experienced increasing of around about 12%.Despite them,
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 and Turkey earned the smallest amount of levy (around 16,15%) from 1975 to 1985 respectively.
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, as previously the USA in 1995 and 2005 stayed stable (about 24%).
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Japan
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 and Sweden rapidly increased in the
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 years by around 9% and 20%.
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, Turkey collected generally around 11% of the tax.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • tax collection
  • percentage (%)
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • increase/decrease
  • economic impact
  • tax rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data interpretation
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