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Describe a difficult decision that you might take in future What the decision is about? Why you want to take it? How will it affect your prospects?

#decision #future #prospects
As I am
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 my life, I often make important decisions that not only affect my future but
also
 my present. Right now I work in the food industry and it has been eight years,
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, it has been less
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interesting
 for me to work there. I know I will have to make
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the decision
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 to change my job in
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 months. The reason I am willing to alter it
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same
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 duties at my work
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 time and I started feeling frustrated with the same routine.
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, I want some change and satisfaction in my life as I can not stick
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 one particular thing I want some new experience in life.
However
, I agree
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 me immensely as I have to make my everyday routine wisely and
also
 need to find
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 job which has become difficult to get a job. But I think I will manage everything by myself.
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introduction conclusion present
Consider starting with a more engaging introduction that clearly states your essay's topic and sets the stage for the discussion. Adding a concluding sentence or paragraph that summarizes your main points and reiterates your decision can help improve the overall structure.
logical structure
Ensure the essay follows a logical sequence. For instance, discuss the dissatisfaction with your current job first, then elaborate on the decision to change jobs, and finally address how it will impact your future.
relevant specific examples
Include specific examples and details affecting your decision, such as instances of routine tasks that lead to frustration. It would strengthen the argument if you can mention any potential new job prospects or how you plan to handle the job search.
clear comprehensive ideas
To improve task achievement, focus on expanding your ideas. For example, explain how a new job can bring satisfaction and excitement to your life or how it can open up new opportunities. This will make your response more comprehensive and thorough.
complete response
You have clearly identified the difficult decision and explained why this decision is important for you, which shows a good understanding of the task.
logical structure
The essay has a clear direction and stays focused on the main topic of making a career change.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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