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The chart below gives information about billions of euros invested in four areas by various organisations.

The bar chart compares billions of
euros
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 invested in four areas,
such
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 as
machinery
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, building,
staff
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 training and
research
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, by different
organizations
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.
It is clear that
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organization
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Organization
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B
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 invested the most
overall
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,
while
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organization
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 D invested the least. The
area
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 that
organizations
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 invested in the most is
staff
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 training,
whereas
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machinery
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 is the
area
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 that
organizations
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 invested in the least.
Organization
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B
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 spent the most
money
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, from 0.9
billion
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euros
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 on
machinery
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 to 1.9
billion
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euros
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 on
staff
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 training.
Organization
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B
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 was followed by
organizations
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 A and C, which spent from 1
billion
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euros
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 on
machinery
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 to 1.5 on building and .8
billion
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euros
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 on
staff
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 training to 1.3
billion
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euros
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 on
machinery
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 and
research
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, respectively.
By contrast
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,
Organizations
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 D and E, spent the least amount of
money
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 compared to the other
organizations
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, no more than 1
billion
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euros
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 on any
area
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, which they both spent on building.
Overall
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, the
area
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 that the
organizations
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 spent the most on is building.
For example
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,
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organization
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organizations
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 A and
B
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 invested from 1.4 to 1.5
billion
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euros
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 in
this
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area
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.
Organizations
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 C, D and E
also
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 spent a lot of
money
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 on building, 1
billion
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euros
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 each.
Staff
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 training is another
area
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 that
organizations
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spent
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spend
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 a lot of
money
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 on.
For instance
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,
organization
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B
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 spent 1.9
billion
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euros
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 and
organization
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 A spent 1.2
billion
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euros
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 on the same
area
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.
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 C, D and E all spent more than .7
billion
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euros
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 on
this
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area
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.
By contrast
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, not as much
money
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 was invested in
machinery
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 and
research
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. No company spent more than 1.3
billion
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euros
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 on
machinery
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 or more than 1.6
billion
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euros
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 on
research
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast, overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words euros, machinery, staff, research, organizations, organization, b, area, money, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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