Some people believe that radio is the best source to get news while other think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There is no denying the fact that
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there
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a lot
of different ways to get news.
While
it is a commonly held belief that
radio
is the best way to know the news as some people say , there is
also
an argument that says that TV is much better to keep in catch on everything.
This
essay will analyse
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. on
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hand, TV could be better than
radio
because you can listen and watch at the same time.
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the radio
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radio,
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you just can listen to info but
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the television
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you can see the exact scene .
In addition
, it is so easy to use because you just have to press the button and it will start.
For example
Chernobyl disaster when you see the place and the movie that they did about it you will be able to
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understand
more.
On the other hand
,
radio
might be something that older people would prefer because they get used to it . it is
also
possible to say that , they spend their whole life
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using
it so they find it much easier than television
On the contrary
, young people find it more difficult to use. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
question. On balance,
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tend to believe that Modern ways
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news
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are better than old ways
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Work on providing more specific examples to support your points. For instance, you mentioned the Chernobyl disaster but didn't fully explain how TV coverage of it was superior to radio coverage.
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Ensure that your ideas are clear and comprehensive throughout the essay. Some sentences could be phrased more clearly to improve clarity.
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Remember to capitalize the first letter of sentences and proper nouns for proper formatting.
introduction highlight
The introduction clearly sets out the topic and discusses both viewpoints.
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The essay is logically structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the argument and states your opinion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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