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The diagram describes the production of canned fruits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram describes the production of canned fruits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures illustrate the process of manufacturing canned
fruits
.
Overall
, the production process was complex and consisted of 14 steps.
Initially
,
fruits
 are picked from the orchard and transported to the factory, where
fruits
 in unsatisfactory shapes are chosen and disposed
.
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of.
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 The
remining
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remaining
fruits
 will
then
transferred
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be transferred
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 to a scale for weighing, before being washed by a tap. After
fruits
 are cleaned with water, they are sent to a fridge so that they can be stored at a cool temperature. The
fruits
 are
then
 ready for peeling and dividing into smaller parts with a knife, in order to place them in a can for soaking with water, juice and syrup. Once soaking is completed, workers will seal the Jar and cook it for sterilisation before cooling it down again. To finalise the process, cooled cans of
fruits
 are packed into boxes and are ready to be transferred to supermarkets.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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