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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The table illustrates the three different sources of police
budget
 in 2017 and 2018 and the table compares the three areas that the
money
 is distributed to.
Overall
, the
budget
increases
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increased
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 slightly in 2018, most of which
comes
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came
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 from the national government and the the least amount of
money
comes
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came
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 from other resources. The proportion of salaries for staff accounts
the
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for the
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 most
although
 it declines gradually
in contrast
 to technology with a small rise. Starting with the table, the total amount of
budget
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the budget
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increases
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increased
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 slightly from just above 300
million
euro
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euros
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 in 2007 to about 318
million
euro
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euros
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 in 2018.
Furthermore
, all the sources fund more
money
 in 2018 than in 2017 with the national
goverment
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government
 distributing the most
money
 with about 177
million
euro
, followed by local taxes with around 102
million
euro
.
Nevertherless
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Nevertheless
, the least amount of
money
 is
founded
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found
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by
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on
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 other resources with over 38
million
euro
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euros
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 in 2018. Turning to the pie chart, the largest rate of
budget
 goes to salaries for staff and officers with 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018. As it
experieces
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experiences
experienced
 a small drop in 2018, the proportion of
money
 distributed to technology
rises
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rose
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 dramatically from 8% to 14 % respectively.
On the other hand
, the rates of
money
 for buildings and transport remain steady at 17% in both years, making it the second most dominant area of the three.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money, million, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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