The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. 

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
The figure below illustrates imprisonment rates with respect to year and region. Based on the data provided the number of people confided in prisons has increased in Great Britain and New Zealand
whereas
the other three nations, Australia, United States and Canada, show no definitive upward or downward progress. Contrary to popular belief, when it comes to the three mentioned countries above, the graph does not show a paradoxical or direct relation. It is worth noting that the
overall
trend in Canada has been reductive and an impressive decline was
also
seen in 1980 in Australia
while
in the same year, a massive outburst
has
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made the
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trend step up. The mentioned points show themselves better when comparing the “up and down” shape of the graph in Canada and Australia versus the US.
Overall
, it can be seen that the given information,
while
educating, lacks insight into the ratio in accordance with the region’s population. When it comes to criminal info considering the population size is an important factor, which could be beneficial for more accurate results.
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