An increasing number of doctors and professors are leaving their poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does it cause and what are the solutions.

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both sides, I believe that medical staff must be in all
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Human capital flight
  • Developing countries
  • Developed countries
  • Healthcare system
  • Educational sector
  • Medical expertise
  • Foreign aid
  • Economic disparities
  • Professional retention
  • Work incentives
  • Infrastructure
  • Temporary migration
  • Knowledge transfer
  • Telemedicine
  • E-learning
  • Mentorship
  • International cooperation
  • Manpower
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