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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables illustrate the amount of coffee and bananas with Fairtrade-labelled which were sold in the years
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1999 and 2004 among five countries in Europe.
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Switzerland
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 dominated the
sales
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 of bananas labelled,
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UK
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 led in the
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 of coffee. It is
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 noteworthy that most of the countries showed an upward trend in
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 except Denmark and Sweden. It is seen that the money gained from selling the labelled coffee in
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UK
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 is 1.5
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millions
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euros
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, which was only the third-highest
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 in 1999,
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Switzerland
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 was the highest with 3
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euros
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.
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, by 2004, the number of
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 reached
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20, exceeding
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, which only climbed slightly to 6. Coffee’s sale in Sweden was the lowest with just 0.8 and 1
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euros
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 respectively. In comparison with the selling amount of Fairtrade-labelled bananas in
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, which was 15 before growing to 47
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millions
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euros
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, the figures
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UK
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 and Belgium were 5.5 and 4.
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, Sweden and Denmark were the two only countries that experienced a fall in
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, which plunged to 1 and 0.9 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words switzerland, sales, uk, millions, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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