The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate information about the purpose of
energy
usage in an average
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Australian
household and the amount of greenhouse gas
emissions
which are released from
this
energy
use.
Overall
, the
energy
is
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consumed for heating is the most in Australia.
In addition
,
water
heating accounts
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second proportion in total,
while
it makes the most
emissions
.
To begin
from the first pie chart, heating and
water
heating are households that consume
energy
the most in surveyed activities, accounting
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three
fouth
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fourth
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at 42% and 30%
repectively
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respectively
. Meanwhile, other households use the amount of
energy
is
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unconsiderable with refrigeration at 7%, lighting at 4% and cooling at 2%. The rest is
a
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half of the
energy
for
water
heating. Turning toward
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the second graph, it is worth noting that
water
heating is ranked
the
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second
about
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using
energy
,
nevertheless
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it is the main reason which is
polluted
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in Australia, which accounts
a
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third
in
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of
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total
emissions
.
Moreover
, refrigeration and other appliances
also
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more
greenhousegas
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greenhouse gas
greenhouse-gas
greenhouses
gas at 14% and 28%,
while
it only consumes about 7% and 15%
the
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total
energy
.
By contrast
, the
energy
for heating is the most
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, the
emisions
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emissions
of it is only
a
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half of the
emissions
of
water
heating.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, emissions, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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