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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.
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The table provides information about the figures for adults who participated in major sports between 1997 and 2017.
overall
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,
It is clear that
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 tennis, rugby, football, swimming, golf, and basketball had an upward trend,
while
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 cricket had a downward trend over the period. The highest was seen in tennis,
in contrast
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, the lowest was recorded in cricket. It can be seen in the table, tennis stood at 50
thousand
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 in 1997, and it increased significantly to 55
thousand
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 in 2017. Rugby went up from 31 to 49
thousand
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 between 1997 and 2017. in 1997, football stood at 31
thousand
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,
then
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 it climbed to 58
thousand
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 over 20 years. golf went up from 31 to 32
thousand
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 from 1997 to 2017. basketball stood at 9
thousand
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 in 1997, and it increased to 22
thousand
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 in 2017.
in contrast
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, cricket declined from 28 to 8
thousand
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 from 1997 to 2017.
while
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 swimming remains unchanged at 32
thousand
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 from 1997 to 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Participation levels
  • Major sports
  • Noticeable changes
  • General trend
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Stable
  • Sport-specific
  • Popularity
  • Speculate
  • Societal changes
  • Technological impact
  • Growth in sports culture
  • Influential events
  • Prediction
  • Future trends
  • Data analysis
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