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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Firstly
, the graphic gives information regarding estimated world illiteracy
rates
, by region and by gender,
last
 year. After
that
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that,
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this
 table has two categories and six countries. These are developed countries, Latin
American
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America
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, East
Asia
, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
.
Secondly
, when we look at the chart south
asia
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Asia
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 has less
rate
 is 3%
to
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for
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female
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females
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 and much
rate
 is 60%. Later
on
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on,
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 other less
rate
is
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in
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 East
Asia
8
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at 8
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%.
Furthermore
, Sub-saharan
Asia
 and Arab States are close to each
order
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other
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 in male
rates
.
Also
, South
Asia
 has
top
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a top
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rate
30
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of 30
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% in
male
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males
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. As an extra South
Asia
’s male
rates
 and female
rates
near
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 to each other.
Thirdly
,
this
 graphic which is above mentioned describes estimated world illiteracy
rates
 by region and by gender for the
last
 year. The peak record is 60%
to
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in
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 South
Asia
 and a low ebb is 1%
to
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for
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Devoloped
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Developed
 countries. From my point of view record high is female.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, asia, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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