Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for instance, through cellphone tracking and security. cameras. In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
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You identified several key benefits of technology in monitoring, especially related to crime prevention and public safety.
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