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The table shows information about students studying in Australian university in 2009.

The table shows information about students studying in Australian university in 2009.
The table below gives
information
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 about
students
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 studying at an
Australia
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Australian
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 university
on
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in
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 six departments in 2009.
Overall
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, females
has
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have
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 the largest
percentages
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percentage
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 of
students
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 studying,
whereas
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first
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the first
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 language
not
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, not
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 English category has the lowest numbers in
table
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the table
a table
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. Looking
to
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at
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 the details, the highest
percentage
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 of females studying in humanities was 72,
while
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on
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in
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education
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the education
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 department was 68. The number of females studying
in
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apply
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science and
in
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apply
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psychology did not have a big difference ( 52 and 16
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percentage
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).
Information
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 technology has only 17,
whereas
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 the lowest one was 15
at
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in
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 engineering. The
percentage
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 of first language not English category in humanities was 12, at the same time
information
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 technology was at 49.
Moreover
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, the number of science departments was 45,
when
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while
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 education
has
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had
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 only 16. In first language
not
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, not
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 English in engineering the
percentage
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 of
student
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students
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 studying was 42, but in
physics
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physics,
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 it was just 38.
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Students
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For students
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 who
studying
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studied
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in
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at
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 an Australian university but
born
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were born
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 outside the country in physics and
information
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 the
percentage
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 of
students
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was
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were
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 almost similar (56 and 56). Whilst, the digit in science was 31, but engineering has 48.
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Although
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However
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, it was only 20
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percentage
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per cent
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 of
students
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 who born outside Australia
studying in
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studied
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 humanities and 23 in
education
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the education
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 department.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words information, students, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
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