The charts below shoes one government's spending on culture ad education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts
gives
information about one Change the verb form
give
Correct your spelling
government's
government
goverment's
using money on Culture and Correct your spelling
government's
learning
in two years 1995 and 2005 and the amount of Capitalize word
Learning
people
sharing in four arts
in this
same years.
Overall
, it is
Clear
that the number of Fix capitalization
clear
persons
who Replace the word
people
participating
in Wrong verb form
participated
arts
events were
the biggest percentage in both 1995 and 2005 than Correct subject-verb agreement
was
others
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other
arts
. In 1995 music
arts
Correct word choice
and arts
was
the higher proportion Change the verb form
were
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of govermant
govermant
spending but it Correct your spelling
government
go
down Wrong verb form
went
Correct article usage
a littel
littel
in 2005.
The percentage Correct your spelling
little
Change preposition
of goverment
goverment
spending on Correct your spelling
government
music
was the biggest proportion than
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of
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
arts
in 1995 , following
by Wrong verb form
followed
visual
and the lowest one was literature. Fix the agreement mistake
visuals
However
, in 2005 theatre and music
were the higher
two Correct word choice
apply
arts
the
same percentage Change preposition
with the
spending
. Change preposition
of spending
Also
visual Add a comma
Also,
arts
and literature were the same.In 2005 the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
people
participating in music
were
Change the verb form
was
it
around 120,000, Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
it increased gradually to 150, 000 in 2005.
The number of people
who participating
in theatre Wrong verb form
participated
arts
were
between 80,000, Correct subject-verb agreement
was
90,000
Correct word choice
and 90,000
approximatly
in 1995 and 2005. Visual Correct your spelling
approximately
arts
participating people
Were exactly 50,000 but it
Change the pronoun
its
decline
to around 49,000 in 2005.Wrong verb form
declined
In contrast
, literature
Correct article usage
the literature
partiapating
Correct your spelling
participating
people
were the lowest number it
was around 30,000 in 1995 and it rose to 40,000 in 2005.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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You made an effort to describe changes and make comparisons between the years 1995 and 2005.
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