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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
map
 depicts the layout of
measure
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the measure
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 in 1998 and in 2008 some transformations have
made
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been made
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 in 2008 in the museum. After analysing the
map
, in 1998, there were permanent
exhibition
rooms
 in the north-west
while
,the north-east
also
 covered with
the
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apply
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permanent
exhibition
rooms
.
Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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 in the
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south-west,
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south-west
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southwest
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 there were temporary
exhibition
rooms
 whilst
south-east
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southeast
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 some area was covered with permanent
exhibition
rooms
along with
 a shop, WC and bags and coats.The
center
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centre
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 of the
map
 consists of a garden and tickets , entrance and exit
were
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are
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 at the bottom of the
map
.
Further
, in 2008 after some changes in northwest restaurants were constructed and
northeast
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the northeast
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 was unaltered.
Whereas
 shops' bags and coats were transformed toward the southwest,
wc
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WC
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is shifted to the upper of the
map
 beside the cafe.
however
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However
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 the south-west contains permanent
exhibition
rooms
, whilst, a cafe sitting area and fountain are built in the centre of the
map
.
Overall
, some changes were made in the new plan as it can be seen cafe sitting area and fountain were established in 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, exhibition, rooms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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