You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people believe that governments should have access to people’s mobile phone call records and messages for safety reasons. Others believe that this information is private and should not be available without permission. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
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Many individuals often say that calls made on mobile devices should be tapped by the
government
for safety concerns. However
, another set of people claim that due to
privacy reasons
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reasons,
this
information
should be kept private and should only be accessed on
special permission. From my perspective, the call log history of a person should only be checked if some criminal evidence is found against that person. Change preposition
with
Although
, tapping helps detecting
crimes at early stages, leakage of personal Wrong verb form
detect
information
in
highly likely.
Tracking phone calls Correct your spelling
is
serve
as an early warning sign for Correct subject-verb agreement
serves
prevention
of many crimes that are supposed to take place in the near future; Correct article usage
the prevention
and
Correct word choice
apply
hence
, prevention measures should be taken beforehand. For example
, In Iran, the government
located a terrorist who made a phone call to his fellow companion, signalling to attack young artists in a club. Crimes like these ought to be prevented by disclosure of public data. Therefore
, it is advantageous to have access to personal information
.
Nevertheless
, exploitation and leaking of data is likely under such
circumstances, as the information
is widely available it could be sold for monetary gains. For instance
, the public will bribe some officials or try to hack the network to retrieve other individual's call history. Also
, the criminals tend to use devices which are not registered under their names and they communicate with each other in code languages. Thus
, the real issue can not be resolved.
In conclusion, people often put forward the argument whether phone calls should be tracked by the government
, or not. From my point of view, the data should only be accessed by the government
if the need arises. In spite of the fact that tracking is a prevention measure, it invades privacy.Submitted by bidingmehakjot on
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Expand on your argument by exploring more angles or nuances related to both sides of the debate. This will enrich your discussion and display a deeper engagement with the topic.
introduction conclusion present
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supported main points
You provided a relevant example to support your point about government surveillance preventing crime, which strengthens your argument.