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Reading books keeps a person's mind active, whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#books #person #mind #films #television #imagination
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Some people believe that the habit of reading
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 activates a
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's mind, which is not possible by watching
television
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 or
films
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, and a
person
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 does not utilize his
imagination
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power
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 here. I personally agree with
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 viewpoint because reading helps to utilize a
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's
imagination
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power
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,
whereas
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 watching
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 and
films
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do
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 not initiate imaginative thinking and feelings. Reading
books
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 helps to utilize a
person
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's imaginative
power
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. Through his reading, a
person
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 can visualize what is happening in the story. It activates his mind, helps to increase his thinking
power
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, and nurtures his
imagination
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. A
person
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 understands and identifies his thought process
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 reading a book.
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, in Japan,
children
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 are encouraged to read
books
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instead
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 of watching
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television
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 because reading
books
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 helps to increase their imaginative
power
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.
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children
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 perform well in school exams.
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, watching
television
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 and
films
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do
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 not initiate imaginative thinking because a
person
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 sees images and videos in them. He or she cannot visualize and think what is happening in them because they are watching them. It
supresses
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suppresses
 their imaginative thinking, and
do
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 not encourage them to visualize on their own.
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, in Canada, parents do not let their
children
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to
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watch
television
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 before the age of 5, because at
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 age, a child's
imagination
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power
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 increases.
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, they do not allow
children
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 to watch
television
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 at
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 age.
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, reading
books
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 activates a child's mind, and helps him to increase his
imagination
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. Watching TV or
films
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 restricts
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 sense.
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Task Response
Ensure to include a counterargument or acknowledge the other perspective to make your response more balanced.
Task Response
While the main points are well supported, try to expand on the examples given to make them more comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow your argument easily.
Task Achievement
Relevant examples are used to support the argument, such as the example about Japan and reading habits.
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