the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
The line graph depicts the
number
of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
in
7-year
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a 7-year
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period.
Overall
,
total
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number
of
visitors
grow considerably, with
satying
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sitting
on
cruise
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the cruise
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overtaking staying on
island's
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the island's
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popularity by mid-2015. In 2010, one
millions
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million
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of
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visitors
visited the
island
, the majority of whom
prefered
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preferred
to stay on
island
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the island
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over
the
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cruise
. The
number
of
visitors
prefering
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preferring
prefer
to stay on
island
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the island
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remained unchanged
untill
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until
early-2011, at almost 0.7
million
. By the same time, the
number
of
visitors
staying on a
cruise
reached 0.5
million
. From 2011 onward, the
number
of
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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rose gradually to a high of 1.5
million
by 2013 and remained unaltered for the following 2
year
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. The
number
of
visitors
staying on
cruise
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a cruise
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,
on the other hand
, increased to just over 1
million
by 2015, before
witnwssing
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witnessing
a drop to its
inital
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initial
number
by 2012. Between 2015 and 2016 total
number
of
visitors
plateaued. and by mid-2015 the
number
of
cruise
voyagers and those who stayed on the
island
were the same, at about 1.3
million
. By the end of the
period
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cruise
was the
prefered
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preferred
dwell for
visitors
as 2
millions
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million
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of
total
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a total
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3.5
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of 3.5
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million
peope
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people
stayed
in
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on
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a
cruise
for the time of their visit.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, cruise, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.

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  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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