The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates three potential sites, marked as A, B, and C, for a leisure centre.
Overall
, it can be seen that
while
A is the most accessible yet suffers from pollution and C offers the best quality air
due to
its isolated place,
location
B compromised both of them. The relaxed place in
location
A will be located in an industrial area.
While
it is the most convenient
location
due to
its direct access to a main road, the factories produce air pollution, making it a significant drawback.
Additionally
, there is a river next to it, which is potentially polluted
due to
factories' waste. Moving to the left side of A, there is
location
B. There are some buildings exhibited
in
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on
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this
site, surrounded by trees.
Moreover
,
this
site is near to the main road which is accessible for transportation and a river is spotted next to the
location
.
Lastly
,
location
C is the most remote area among others. It is in the middle of
tree
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area, offering the best natural site and the best air quality.
However
, it may have difficulties in transportation for visitors
due to
its isolated
location
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words location with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • space constraints
  • costs
  • prime location
  • secluded
  • natural area
  • serene environment
  • remoteness
  • accessibility
  • transport facilities
  • advantageous
  • undisturbed leisure
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