The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates three potential sites, marked as A, B, and C, for a leisure centre.
Overall
, it can be seen that while
A is the most accessible yet suffers from pollution and C offers the best quality air due to
its isolated place, location
B compromised both of them.
The relaxed place in location
A will be located in an industrial area. While
it is the most convenient location
due to
its direct access to a main road, the factories produce air pollution, making it a significant drawback. Additionally
, there is a river next to it, which is potentially polluted due to
factories' waste.
Moving to the left side of A, there is location
B. There are some buildings exhibited in
Change preposition
on
this
site, surrounded by trees. Moreover
, this
site is near to the main road which is accessible for transportation and a river is spotted next to the location
.
Lastly
, location
C is the most remote area among others. It is in the middle of tree
area, offering the best natural site and the best air quality. Correct article usage
a tree
However
, it may have difficulties in transportation for visitors due to
its isolated location
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