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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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This
 line chart illustrates the number of users
for
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 an underground station, located in
london
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London
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, between the time 6 o'clock in the morning, and 22.
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, it appears that the peak times are 8, and 18, fuerther more, the lowest times are 6, 16, and 22. Getting into more
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detail
detailes
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detail
,
number
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a number
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 of passengers starts low at the
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beginning
begening
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beginning
 of the day, after that it
reachs
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reaches
 400
person
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people
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 in 8, with an average of 250 in 7 and 9,
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followed
flolloewd
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followed
 by, a small steady state around 11 to 15, with
average
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 of 300 users, than it gets to the second peak, between 17 and 19, almost reaching 400, than for 20, 21, and 22, it kept low, with an average 150. In general, it seems that the behaviour of passengers in
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the first
 half of
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the
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in
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 almost
simillar
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similar
 to the second half, as if the people go in the morning and come back again
in
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the
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apply
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nights
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night
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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