The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The narrative to minimize
traffic
in urban areas by implementing mobility
restrictions recently is a hot discussion among citizens. Activity that supports traffic
such
as going to school or work is
need to add some restrictions, for Unnecessary verb
apply
sake
of reducing Correct article usage
the sake
traffic
. Objectively, there are some benefits, however
Add a comma
however,
i
partly disagree with some extent for Change the capitalization
I
this
solution.
First of all, mobility
restriction will be beneficial to some extent. By reducing
Change preposition
Reducing
a
number of Change the article
the
vehicle
, Change to a plural noun
vehicles
it
can increase significantly Correct pronoun usage
apply
air
quality index in Correct article usage
the air
city
. Add an article
the city
For example
, during pandemic
era in 2020, all citizens in Jakarta, Indonesia were forced to reduce their Add an article
a pandemic
the pandemic
mobility
. At that time, air quality was so good. It is a
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apply
prove
by implementing Correct your spelling
proven
mobility
restrictions, the number of emission
can Change to a plural noun
emissions
be reduce
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be reduced
while
air quality will increase.
Conversely
, despite benefits
that Correct article usage
the benefits
has
been Change the verb form
have
mention
above, Wrong verb form
mentioned
i
argue that Change the capitalization
I
mobility
restriction is quite impractical. The main reason is that not all activity can be done from home. Moreover
, more disadvantages can occur when most citizens were
forced to stay at home. We can recall what the impact happened during Wrong verb form
are
covid-19
era. Correct article usage
the covid-19
Firstly
, the number of divorce cases increased dramatically. As a result
, the happiness index in Indonesia started to decrease. Instead
, the government is required to produce public goods such
as public transportation. Railway in the greater Jakarta area is proven
solution that can reduce Correct article usage
a proven
traffic
.
To conclude
, i
believe Change the capitalization
I
this
initiative will bring more disadvantages rather than benefits. Furtheremore
, The authorities should give more attention Correct your spelling
Furthermore
on
public transportation Change preposition
to
that is
reliable, accessible and affordable for all people.Submitted by muhammad.andhitya on
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task achievement
Make sure to fully engage with the question. Although you provide some interesting points, you could discuss more varied methods to reduce city traffic aside from mobility restrictions to create a more balanced and comprehensive argument.
coherence cohesion
While the essay has an overall logical structure, it could benefit from a clearer organization of ideas. Try to ensure that each paragraph presents a distinct point and supports it with examples or reasoning that aligns directly with the topic statement.
coherence cohesion
Your essay maintains a fairly clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your discussion and providing closure.
task achievement
You provide a relevant real-world example by referring to the situation in Jakarta during the pandemic, which helps to illustrate your points.