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Households with regular use of a car, great britain

#households #car #britain
This
 line graph shows the percentages of
households
 with regular use of a
car
 in the UK. It is clear from the graph that the average figure for
families
 with
one
car
were
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 higher than other circumstances over the 36 years.
In contrast
,
households
 with three or more
cars
 were consistently the lowest.
Families
 without a
car
 accounted for about 48% in 1971, higher than
families
 with
one
car
, two
cars
, three or more
cars
, which stood at around 43%, 7%, and 1%.
Whereas
 the situation changed obviously in 2007,
where
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when
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 the highest figure was
on
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for
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families
 bought
one
car
. From 1971 to 2007, the share of
families
 owning
one
car
fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 slightly but remain
on
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in
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 a high position.
However
, the number of no-
car
families
 dropped dramatically
among
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during
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 these years and fell behind
one
-
car
households
 in 1975.
Households
 that have two
cars
,
by contrast
, rose significantly during the period and
surpass
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 no-
car
households
 in 2003. The figure for
families
pocessing
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possessing
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 three or more
cars
 increased slightly but remained the lowest.
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introduction conclusion present
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clear comprehensive ideas
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complete response
The essay clearly identifies and compares the trends of car ownership over time.
logical structure
The overall structure is logical and easy to follow.
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The essay has successfully highlighted key trends and comparisons in car ownership across different years.

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