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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The line chart compares the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who visited in
Island
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 from 2010 to 2017
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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total
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a total
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number
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 of
visitors
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 who visited the
Island
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 over the period increased significantly.
On the other hand
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, the figure for the
visitor
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visitors
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 who who stayed on cruise ships and stayed on the
Island
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while
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,
visitors
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 rose gradually from 2010 to 2017. In terms of
visitor
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visitors
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, the total
number
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 of tourists a light increased
at
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to
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 1
million
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., it was rising from 2010 to 2015. The visitor’s
number
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 of
million
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 stood at around 2.7 in 2015 and 2016.
However
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, the
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 dramatically increased and reached a
peck
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peak
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 of 3.5 billion between 2016 to 2017. In 2010, the figure for
tourist
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tourists
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 who prepped to stay on chips ships was just slowly decreased in the years of 2010 and 2013.
In addition
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, the
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 staying on cruise ships gradually increased and reached
it
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its
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peck
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peak
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 of 2
million
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 in 2017. On the
another
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other
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 hand,
visitors
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 stayed on
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island
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the island
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 and it had stood from 2010 to 2011.
However
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,
visitors
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stayed
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who stayed
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 on
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island
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the island
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 slowly rose in 2012 and 2015.
Then
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 slightly decreased,again it increased and reached 1.5
million
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 in 2017.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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