Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others believe skills and experience are more important. Discuss bot sides and give your opinion.

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in the way to find
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great work but
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the opposite, they believe other skills are more significant.
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university
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are taken the huge amounts of people in different
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,
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task achievement
Try to develop the ideas more fully and provide clear examples to support both perspectives.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your thoughts to create a clearer logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Add a conclusion to summarize the main points and restate your opinion.
task achievement
You've introduced the topic and presented both sides you intend to discuss.
coherence cohesion
Your essay starts with a clear statement that indicates what the essay will discuss.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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