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Band 4.5

Governments should spend more money on public transportation systems than on road infrastructure. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, public
transportation
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 is one of the essential things that we need in our daily life activities.
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 that, there is
road
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infrastructure
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 which
also
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 supports our movement by using private or public vehicles. Ultimately, I partially agree that the
government
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 should spend money on public
transportation
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, but I
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 recognize that
road
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infrastructure
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also
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 takes a major portion of our
transportation
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 facilities.
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, public facilities not only are used by our people to support their needs for
transportation
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,
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 but
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 to reduce traffic jams.
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, many cities have a higher population than rural areas, its related to a higher number of private vehicles used by society.
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 one of the reasons why public
transportation
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 needs to be considered by the
government
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.
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, some people have the opinion that
road
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infrastructure
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 is more important than public
transportation
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 so the
government
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 should spend more money.
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 of these becoming debatable, the
government
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 should prioritize solutions which will taken for society.
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, in cities with the number of citizens growing fast, it is necessary for the
government
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 to take second priority for
road
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infrastructure
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 and give a major portion of attention to public
transportation
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. In conclusion, even public
transportation
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 and
road
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infrastructure
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 have their own advantage, it
is depends
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 on how the
condition
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conditions
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 in the location of the
government
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 lead.

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task achievement
Ensure that your main points are consistently supported with clear examples and detailed explanations to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Try to organize your essay more logically, making sure that each paragraph has a clear purpose and transitions smoothly to the next.
coherence cohesion
You have clearly stated your position in the introduction and reiterated your stance in the conclusion, which provides a sense of completeness to the essay.
task achievement
Your argument is relatively comprehensive, addressing both public transportation and road infrastructure, showing a balanced perspective.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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