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The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart shows the usage of four modes of transport
preffered
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preferred
 by people in European
country
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countries
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 in a
40 year
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40-year
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period
 from 1950 to 1990.
Overall
, the number of
travel
 using
car
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a car
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 increased significantly
whereas
 people commuting
by
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on
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 foot and bike decreased over the
period
 given. In 1950, there were roughly 5%
travel
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of travel
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 made using cars. It grew to a quarter in the middle of the
period
, and reached its peak with almost 40%
travel
, making it the most used type of transport in 1990.
In contrast
, the number of people who walked and rode a bike had an opposite trend. There are around 40%
travel
 by foot
in
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at
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 the beginning of the
period
.
However
, it dropped dramatically to below 20% in 1970 and allocated for only 6% of total
travel
 by 1990.
Similarly
, almost 30% of
total
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the total
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 commute was done by bike. In 1970, it fell to just above 20% of
travel
 and ending with approximately 5%. In 1950, travelling by bus had a total of around 17%
travel
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of travel
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. The total
travel
 number increased by slightly above one-fourth, but it declined to around 15% in 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • modes of transport
  • travellers
  • European country
  • 1950
  • 1990
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • popularity
  • time periods
  • bicycle
  • walking
  • car
  • public transportation
  • motorcycle
  • increased significantly
  • preferred mode of transport
  • stability
  • slight increase
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