Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, there are divided perceptions around children’s
education
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and the need for a more practical approach
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studying
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working
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than the usual academic studying of school
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. Both opinions have the right to exist
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however
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I believe that having a short
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experience
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before university would be a winning point for anyone looking to quickly adapt to the current
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labor
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market
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. Undoubtfully, studying academic
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in school
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as mathematics, physics and history is extremely important for children, because it supports them in building personal identity, early identifying their strengths and talents,
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building
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. These are of foremost significance when it comes to building a solid foundation of knowledge for everyday life. Having to
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at the same time might be overwhelming for teenagers, or even frustrating if done in a subject area which does not suit the student’s preference.
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having the basic knowledge in academic
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taught in school is invaluable to build an educational foundation and effectively choose your profession,
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is not sufficient to join a competitive
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labor
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market
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, which often requires
work
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experience
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even for
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entry-level roles.
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, more countries are currently introducing dual
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, which blends theoretical learning with the practical application of
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, gaining recognition as a functional method to ensure the smooth transition from the class to the
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labor
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market
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. There are plenty of advantages of working
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learning,
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as the chance to put theory into practice, get insights into the real-life application of the studied
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,
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therefore
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getting
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an understanding of how suitable
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one
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profession
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the individual.
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,
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contributing to a conscious career choice, a short working
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would be an asset for
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applications, which many times expect a certain
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already acquired from the applicants.
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, considering that in many instances the
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practice is paid,
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brings an extra bonus to dual
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, which,
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, financially supports young people and stimulates a better perception of the hard
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required to earn money. In conclusion, the dual
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or young students having the
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of working before joining the actual
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labor
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market
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would bring significant added value to both
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the
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seeker and the employer. Having even the shortest
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experience
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can teach practical
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insights, responsibility, social skills and
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enhanced chances to get a competitive entry-level
job
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with minimum effort.

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grammar
Some word choice and grammar are not clear. Fix spelling and verb use.
content
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task response
Clear view that dual education is good and fits a job plan.
coherence
Good use of these links (Thus, Furthermore, In conclusion) to join ideas.
Word Count

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