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The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012

The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012
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The line graph provides
the
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information on how much
coffee
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 exported from three different countries over a decade.
Overall
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, it can be seen that all
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three countries had a growth
on
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in
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 sales throughout
10
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the 10
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years
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 with Brazil
became
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becoming
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a
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 highest exporter and Costa Rica
was
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 the lowest. In terms of Costa Rica trends, in 2002, the number of
coffee
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 exported stood exactly at 15
million
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 before it experienced a moderate decrease by around half in 2006. After that, the amount of
coffee
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 exported had an exponential increase and reached its peak at 20
million
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 within the
last
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 six
years
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.
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, the number of
coffee
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exports
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 in Colombia saw a great growth between 2002 and 2006, from 5 to 12
million
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.
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, in the next two
years
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, it fell sharply to 2
million
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 and it recovered again with a sharp
rose
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 to 15
million
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at the end
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 of the survey. Regarding Brazil, which was the highest exporter within the period, the
overall
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 trend mostly increased during the period. In the first six
years
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,
exports
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 experienced an upward trend with
exports
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 rocketing by 8
million
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. After experiencing a slight slump from 2008 to 2010, the figures started to rise again and finished at 25
million
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coffee
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exports
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, making the country a broken record over the
years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, years, million, exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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