The line graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the DAY in 1992. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph illustrates variations in the percentage of
people
who either watched television or listened to the radio from October to December 1992, at different times of the day
.
Firstly
, regarding
watching television, Change preposition
apply
it
was more common than listening to the radio. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Overall
, three peaks have been shown throughout the day
, all during meals. In fact, the first is around 8 am when people
have breakfast at 10%. Afterwards, it gradually increases until the second peak at roughly 1 pm when people
are more likely to have lunch, involving 15% of the population. At the end
, the last
and highest one with almost half of the audience involved, at 8 pm when people
dine.
Lastly
, talking about radio audiences, an overall
decreasing trend is noticeable in the graph. Although
at the beginning of the Correct word choice
However
day
, there is a spike of more than a quarter of the population, probably due to
the large amount of people
driving at that time of the day
. Later during the day
, there is a gradual downward trend. In conclusion both the lines meet at 3 am when people
are asleep and barely 5% of the audience is using those devices.Submitted by alessandro.talese on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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