A foreign friend of yours plans to visit your place and stay with you,but you are not available on that date.give your friend another alternative date for the visit.In your letter,you should,apologise for it.Explain what you are doing on that date suggest to her an alternate time to come.

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Dear Komal, Hope you and your boyfriend are doing great.

Lastweek

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Last week

,I got your letter in which

you'r

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your

you're

planning to

come

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canada

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Canada

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and spend some time with me.I think that would be

really

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great opportunity for us to spend some

qulity

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quality

time,but

unfortunatly

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unfortunately

I will not be available on that days.I feel really bad to say

this

I have made some plans

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for

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those days when you're planning to see me.I am really very sorry for the

inconvinence

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inconvenience

. I have made plans already with my family

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this

Thanksgiving weekend 11th

october

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to 15th

october

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.We are going to visit my

father in-law's

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friends

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Place in Alberta.

Moreover

, we will visit beautiful lakes as well.That place is quite far from my town,so we have booked flight tickets in advance. Again sorry to say

this

we can't meet on those days,

instead

thanksgiving

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we can plan to meet on

diwali

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.In my perception that would be

great

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time as well.If you can make it your visit on

diwali

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which is after

thanksgiving

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on following weekend.Please try to come on

diwali

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ratherthan

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rather than

thanksgiving

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. I am waiting for your response.I'm very excited to meet you. See you

then

. Best regards, Dhruvi Patel

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

194 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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