The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line depicts the fluctuations in metal
price
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prices
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from 2013 to 2021.It is clear from
graph
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that the palladium
price
dominated compared with other metals from 2018 to 2021 .
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in 2014 the gold
price
experienced a downward of 1500
then
remained stable until 2018 and surged approximately to 2000
then
maintaining a static level from 2020 to 2021 .
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, the expectation
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plladium
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palladium
price
fluctuations between 2013 and 2018
however
, there was
pronounced
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trajectory with palladium
price
escalating to 2500 in 2021.
Conversely
, the platinum
price
witnessed
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percipitous
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precipitous
decline from 1500 to 1000 between 2014 and 2015 .In
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the sebsequent
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sebsequent
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subsequent
year the value of palladium
price
remained constant from 2015
thro
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through
2015 after that , there was a little
increased
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about
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100 by 2021.
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