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7.Some people believe educational qualifications always bring success. Others think educational qualifications do not necessarily bring success. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #qualifications #success
At the present
time
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time,
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 people say that university
education
 is the best way to grow up. The particular reason for circumstance
you
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is you
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 will get a higher
education
moreover
 you can work senior position or in
a big companies
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big companies
a big company
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 and achieve success. But some people
are achieve
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achieve
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 success without higher
education
 and
qualification
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qualifications
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. Nowadays
achieve
Wrong verb form
achieving
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 success is
more easy
Correct word choice
easier
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 than past.
Because technology
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Technology
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 is developing every day and new professions are emerging.
For example
 blogging, mobile graphics and others. To be
blogger
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a blogger
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 you need not higher
education
 from university. But
i
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I
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 prefer staying at university and getting
higher
Correct article usage
a higher
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education
.
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introduction conclusion present
Provide a clear introduction that outlines both views and a conclusion to summarize your opinion.
clear comprehensive ideas
Expand on your points with more comprehensive arguments and examples.
relevant specific examples
Include specific examples to support each point you make for clarity.
complete response
The essay addresses both views of educational qualifications and success, which is good for task achievement.
relevant specific examples
Good example provided, such as blogging and mobile graphics, showing understanding of current job trends.

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