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Band 5

Write the letter to the manager of the delivery company Give details of the delivery Describe what was damaged Say what you would like the manager to do

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Good day, sir or madam! I
write
Wrong verb form
am writing
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this
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 message
,
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apply
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 because during delivery
was
Correct pronoun usage
there was
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little
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a little
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 problem. My newest laptop was destroyed, and it is a big problem
,
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 because
price
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the price
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for
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of
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 my gadget is
big
Correct your spelling
high
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. Your employer gave me its box
on
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at
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 12 o’clock
on
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apply
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last
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 Thursday
on
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at
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 my work in
company
Correct article usage
the company
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 Dell in the central office.
However
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, after delivery and checking
box
Correct article usage
the box
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, we created paper with the detailing problems and both took
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the photo
a photo
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photo
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photos
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.
As well as
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 we called to your
call-center
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call-centre
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 and gave information. But today is not
reaction
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a reaction
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, and my phone was banned in your line. I am so sorry, but my thing was damaged on full pack. I suppose,
on time
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on-time
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 transportation your worker stayed up
other package
Change the wording
another package
other packages
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 with big weigh
,
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apply
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 because laptop and box
is
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are
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 flat. If you
will
Verb problem
apply
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check the photo in
this
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massage
Correct your spelling
message
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, you see
cadaver
Correct article usage
a cadaver
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 of
gadget
Correct article usage
a gadget
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.
On
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At
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this
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 time we have damage
on
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to
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matrix
Correct article usage
the matrix
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, keyboard, frame, motherboard, hard drive and memory. I
don’t
Wrong verb form
didn’t
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can
Verb problem
apply
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check other elements from
hole
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the hole
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. I am sure, your company can buy
new
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a new
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 laptop or make compensation money from
price
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the price
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. I will take you the scan ticket here. I hope will you answer my letter. Looking forward to hearing from you. My sincerely, Cusnir Iaroslav.

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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing the information into distinct paragraphs for clarity. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
task achievement
Work on using more formal language and avoiding informal expressions for business correspondence.
task achievement
Ensure that detailed information like dates and evidence are thoroughly checked for clarity.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a proper greeting and closing, which is important for formal correspondence.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the prompt by describing the delivery details, the damage, and a request for compensation.
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