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Tourism is causing environmental problems all around the world. What is the main problem with this? What can be solution?

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One of the problems
surroundings
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 has been travelling in the
last
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 few years. Tourism increases pollution and waste in the natural world because
quantitiy
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quantity
 is extremely increased and quality is critically decreased.
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, some
goverments
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governments
 should consider that issue significantly. The begin with, some countries accept large numbers
receiving
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of
tourists
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 every year. They can pollute the environmental area of the sea. The rationale behind
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 is that overcrowded travellers visit the beach area only for the winter season, so some
hotel
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 and resorts can'
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 work at their capacity.
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,
study
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 conducted in 2016 on Sebu Island in Thailand received over 1.2
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 visitors between November and January.
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, it is evident that most hotels couldn'
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 control
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 activation.Some travellers might destroy the wildlife near the seashore. It has to limit some numbers of
tourists
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 during peak season.
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, many countries are trying to develop the tourism industry, but it raises the amount of waste in the countryside, even in virgin nature.
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 a factor ensures that some visitors don'
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 have any knowledge of how to relate to nature and they might throw trash wherever. A clear example of
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 can be seen today compared to recent years, as more trash was discarded near the River bank than ever before in Alaska in the United States.
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, it is obvious that
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 local government should provide enough guidance to the new visitors.
Tourists
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 who visited Alaska didn'
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 know any information about waste during their stay in nature. In conclusion,
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 the tourism industry is one of the most significant
sector
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 in the economy of a country.
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, governments should think about well-organised numbers and provide guidance for
tourists
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. As highlighted,
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 would improve each country's positive effect on the environment.

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logical structure
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introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear structure with a well-organized introduction and conclusion.
supported main points
Main points are supported with examples, which help to clarify the problems and solutions discussed.
complete response
The essay addresses the task by discussing both the problems and potential solutions related to tourism and the environment.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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