The diagrams below show the life cycle of a speicies of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a speicies of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides information about the life cycle of
salmon
which is a species of large fish.
Overall
, there are three main stages
begining
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beginning
with fry, ending with
adult
salmon
, before turning back the life cycle. First and foremost, baby salmons are born from
salmon
eggs, which are known as fry. They
have
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3-8
centimeters
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in length and they live in
lower
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the lower
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river, where water flows
fastly
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. It takes them about 4 years to develop in there.
Then
, their size
grow
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up 2-3 times to become smolts.
Secondly
, the smolt immigrates to
open
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sea and lives in there. They mature for 5 years before
tranforming
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transforming
to
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adult
salmon
.
Adult
salmon
may reach 70-76
cemtimeters
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centimetres
in length. They swim to
upper
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the upper
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river,
where
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has
slow
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a slow
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flow. In
this
place,
adult
salmons settle down
approximately
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5-6 months. They seed eggs near
by
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reeds and small stones.
Last
but not least,
salmon
eggs evolve
to
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into
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the
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apply
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fry, which moves to
lower
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the lower
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river
following
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followed
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by water flow. It starts the new
cylce
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cycle
life of
salmon
.
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