In many countries people have to pay for madical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some
people
think madical care should be a free by the government but in many countries
people
also
have to pay for madical payment. Although
medical care should be provided from gavernment and also
people
have to use their buget for medican. Becouse: countries
have to focus for other part of our country such
as millatry, education.
On the one hand people
should pay payment for madican becouse in some cases countries
can not provide with instruments in hospitals. People
health
is most important part of their life. Additionaliy, when people
spend their money for their health
and countries
can focus for other factor of our soceity. For instance
: millatry, education and this
factors will develop in the future life. Thus
, people
have to spend their cash for their health
.
On the other hand
government should implement people
for their health
. Because: population's health
most nessesery things for countries
. When their sitezens healthy it means county is healthy and also
some people
do not have possibility for expend for madican. Government have to ensure people
who do not have possibility for madican such
as old people
and babies.
In conclusion, if people
want to develop other factors of our country they should pay payments for themselves. As well as
gavernments also
responsable for people
health
who have no chance in their budget.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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