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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

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Nowadays, it can be clearly witnessed, that
craze
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 for
study
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 in abroad countries amongst
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 young generation is on trend.
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, migrating to new countries, comes with lots of financial, physical and mental struggles,
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in return,
this
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 hard journey pays with career enhancement,
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 lifestyle, handsome earnings and many more upgrades in life. In
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 essay, I will examine both advantages and disadvantages and explain why I feel like pros
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 more weight
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then
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 cons. It is an indisputable fact that
,
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 moving
to
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overseas for higher education, welcomes
undergraduate
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 with
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 learning and earning. That improves themselves as people,
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 would have been
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 impossible
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 if they had
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studied in their own
country
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, one of my
cousin
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,
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 has achieved his
master
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 degree in software engineering from London,
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, his friend has completed his
master
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 degree
from
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native
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his native
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country
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result
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, my cousin is earning huge, and his friend is not even earning half of it. From
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 scenario, it can be clearly noticed,
more
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 preference is given to
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abroad studies.
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,
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 challenges faced by students overseas are linguistic barriers,mental
sickness
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 that includes anxiety,
home
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homesickness
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sickness
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 and other issues. These drawbacks offer a huge resistance
in
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 achieving goals and dreams. Move to
new
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country
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 is just like
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moving to a whole new world
like
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 different food, timings,
weathers
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, dressing style etc.
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for
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 instance, when I moved to Quebec for my
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 studies, in my daily
schedules
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 I
have
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too
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 face too many
hurdle
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 because
there
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 native language was French.
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, as
a
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 youngest child of my family, I first time moved to
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country
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,
I
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was encountering
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encountered
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home
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homesickness
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sickness
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 too. The way of my conclusion, in
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 upcoming couple of years,
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 for higher degrees, to
fulfill
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 the dream will be seen
very
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 common in every house.
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While the
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The
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 battle between achieving higher studies
from
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in
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new
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a new
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country
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 and linguistics barriers and mental
sickness
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,
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 is always going to exist. But, in return advantages exceeds far
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then
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the
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 disadvantages.

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task response
The essay addresses the prompt and makes a clear argument for why the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks. However, to further improve task response, try to provide a more balanced exploration of the drawbacks, discussing them with the same depth as the benefits.
coherence and cohesion
While the essay is generally well-structured, ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Consider using more linking words and phrases to enhance the flow between ideas.
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Some points, especially about the drawbacks and their impact, are not thoroughly supported with examples. Try to include more specific examples or evidence to back up these claims.
coherence and cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the argument.
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The main argument that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks is consistently supported throughout the essay.
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The use of personal examples, like the cousin’s experience studying in London, adds a personal touch and concreteness to the argument about the benefits of studying abroad.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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