The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The charts compare in ownership of electrical machines and
amount
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the amount
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of time spent doing housework in homes in 1920 and 2019.
Overall
,
it is clear that
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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used highest from other machines.
On the other hand
, the figure for
washing
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machine
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machines
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was
lowest
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the lowest
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in the given years. It is proved that
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the figure for
refrigerator
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was using the highest percentage of 1 to 100,from 1920 to 2019.
However
,
vacuum
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cleaner was
second
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machine
which
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the
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percentage of 30 to 100, from 1920 to 2019. Vacuum cleaner
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increased gradually and reached a peak of the highest. On the
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hand,
in
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1920 to 1960 washing
machine
used
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rose slowly from 30% to 100%.
Then
, in 1980 it
was decreasing
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to 70% from 60%.
Therefore
, in the years
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2000 and 2019 washing
machine
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machines
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used lightly grew from 70% to 75%.
Second
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chart,we can see the number of hours of homework each week, per household number
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declined to 50 from 10, from 1920 to 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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