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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
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The
map
 depicts the planning of
new
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a new
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school
 in the region of Canterbury. After analysing the
map
, it can be clearly seen,
map
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the map
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 consists of
countryside
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the countryside
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 in green colour
while
town
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the town
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center
 in the orange colour at the
center
 of
map
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the map
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whereas
university
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the university
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 is located in the north.
however
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However
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,
sturry
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the sturry
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contain
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contains
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 7000 population is 5km away from the
town
center
 in the north east . Moving ahead,
school
 2 is in the
town
center
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centre
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,
traffic free
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traffic-free
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 area, towards the south of the
map
 whilst,
school
 1 is seen in the
country side
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countryside
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 at the east of the
map
.
Furthermore
, charthan is 7km away from
the
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school
 2 in the corner of
southeast
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the southeast
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 with
population
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a population
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4,500
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of 4,500
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.The
town
center
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centre
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 is surrounded by
the
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housing.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 the two
zone
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zones
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is
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are
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 connected to Canterbury by
main
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the main
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 road.
To sum up
, it is noticeable that
school
 2
is appeared
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appears
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 in the most peaceful region as compared to
school
 1.
school
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School
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 1 is at
the
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a
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 measurable distance from
the the
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school
 2.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, school, town, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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