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the table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. the table shows where the money came from and the charts show how how it was distributed.

the table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. the table shows where the money came from and the charts show how how it was distributed.
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The given proportions display information about
a
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the
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 police
budget
 in 2017 and 2018 in one of the cities of Britain.
Additionally
, the table illustrates where the
budget
 came from, and pie charts show how
it
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apply
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where the money was spent. Generally speaking, it is evident that there
no
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are no
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such
 significant differences in one year,
however
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however,
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 it is seen that
the
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technology replaced
a
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human work, declining the amounts of salaries. Turning to details,
according to
 the table, in both 2017 and 2018, money mostly came from
National
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the National
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 Government, receiving 175.5m and 177.8m respectively.
Furthermore
, Local Taxes
uplifted
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increased
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 from 91.2m to 102.3m,
while
 the amount of
budget
 came from other sources rose only by 0.5. Moving on a pie charts, buildings and transport accounted for 17% of the total percentage in both years, being unchanged. Technology approached
at
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14% in 2018,
however
 at the beginning it was only 8% where
budget
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the budget
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 went.
In contrast
, the salaries experienced a decrease, since falling from 75% in 2017
,
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 to 69% in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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