TASK 1 The diagram above shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonated drinks.

TASK 1  The diagram above shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonated drinks.
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The picture describes the production of canned and bottled carbonated beverages in factories. There are five steps involved in cleaning the
water
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, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering filling and delivering to markets.
Firstly
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, the process starts with filtering raw
water
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using a modern machine by adding
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softener and chemicals . It aims to separate the bacteria from the
water
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.
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, the clean
water
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was pumped into electric heaters. After that, it flows to the cooling pipe to get a lower temperature
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then
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carbon dioxide to make the
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carbonated.
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, all the content
such
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as colouring powder, syrup and flavour mix in the big boiler.
The next step is
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filtering and filling the
water
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into bottles and cans
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then
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and then
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boxing it into cartons.
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, the ready box will be delivered to supermarkets by using trucks and people will get enjoyable beverages.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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