Your friend asked you to find a par-time job for him/her to earn some money while studying. You found a job that might be suitable. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • Give him/her the job description • Explain why he/she should take the job • Say what he/she should do to get the job

#friend #par-time #job #money #description

Dear Maninder, I hope

this

letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing

this

letter to tell you that I have found a

part time

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job for you in a Diagnostic Lab, where you will get an opportunity to take patient's samples and run different tests on them under professional guidance. I think

this

job is suitable for you because you are doing your

Bachelors

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Degree in Lab Technology.

Therefore

, it would help you to learn

practical

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implementation of what you are studying.

Moreover

, you will be performing your job duties under an experienced supervisor, which will

enables

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you to learn some traits of practical importance. In order to, fetch

this

opportunity you will have to undergo a screening process, which

included

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an interview and a written test so that your employer can

access

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assess

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your understanding of the subject. I hope you will like to avail

this

opportunity. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

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structure

Consider separating the job description, reasons for taking the job, and instructions to apply into distinct paragraphs to enhance clarity and organization.

cohesion

Review the sentence structure to ensure smooth flow of ideas, especially in the advice section where you explain the application process.

tone

The letter begins with a warm greeting and concludes with a polite closing, which creates a friendly tone suitable for writing to a friend.

task response

You've clearly answered each part of the task, providing a job description, reasons for suitability, and steps to apply.

writing style

The language used is clear and engaging, which is appropriate for informal communication between friends.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

165 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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