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Band 3.5

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The given diagram illustrates the figure
of
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for
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 expenditure on three categories of fast
food
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 by high, average and
low
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low-income
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income
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groups
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 in the UK during 1990.
Overall
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,
while
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 hamburgers were a popular product for high and
average
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average-income
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income
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groups
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,
people
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 in
low
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low-income
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income
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groups
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 preferred to consume fish and chips,
pizza
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and pizza
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 products had the lowest consumption in the perspective view. Hamburgers were popular in both high and average
salary
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salaries
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 when they spent nearly 42 and 30
pounds
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 per
week
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 to buy
it
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them
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, respectively.
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, if the second rank of expenditure on fast
food
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 in
high
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high-income
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income
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groups
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 was pizza with 18
pounds
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,
people
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 in average salary
groups
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 spend only 12
pounds
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 per
week
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 for it.
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, around 25
pounds
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 per
week
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 was paid for buying fish and chips products
while
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people
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in
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with
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 high
income
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 pay only 16
pounds
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 a
week
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 for
this
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 kind of
food
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.
According to
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 the rest
groups
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, fish and chips
was
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were
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 the most popular product in the
low
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low-income
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income
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 graph, with roughly 17
pounds
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 being paid weekly.
This
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 figure was followed by the consumption of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 was only 6
pounds
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 higher,
while
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 the number of
people
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 purchasing pizza was 7
pounds
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 per
week
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 which is the least common
food
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 product in the given graph.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Work on improving transitions between paragraphs and ideas to enhance the logical flow of the report.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a clear introduction and a summarizing conclusion to increase clarity and completeness.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific data analysis of the low-income group's spending habits for greater depth.
Task Achievement
Clarify some of the sentence structures that might be slightly confusing, such as 'people in average salary groups spend only 12 pounds.'
Task Achievement
The report effectively covers the spending habits of different income groups.
Task Achievement
Main points are supported with relevant data, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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