The charts show the main methods of transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the main methods of transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009.

Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the main means of transport for
people
commuting to one
university
from 2004 to 2009.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the proportion of
people
travelling to one
university
by friendly-eco transportations involving bicycle,
bus
, train, and walking was more popular
while
that figure for cars was less popular over the period shown. Remarkably, the
bus
became by far the most popular method of transport. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see in 2004, there was a half of
people
going to a
university
by car, and 33% by
bus
.
While
, only 16% of the total went to their
university
by train, walking, and bicycle, at 3%, 4%, and 9%, respectively.
At the end
of the period, the proportion of
people
travelling by
bus
to their
university
increased significantly to almost half ( 46%) which was the highest figure, those who travelling by bicycle grew nearly two times to 16%, and
people
went to a
university
by train and walking witnessed a slight increase, at 4% and 6%, respectively.
By contrast
, the figure for
people
who drove cars to a
university
reduced to about a quarter of the total (28%)
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