The graph and the chart below show the numer of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and the chart below show the numer of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
graph
illustrates the subject chosen by
unversity
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university
students in 2021. The bar shows the result depends on the
gender
, men and women. And the line
graph
represent
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represents
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the total
preperation
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preparation
.
Overall
,
It is clear that
the Social sciences accounted for The majority in both
gender
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genders
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,
while
, Agrilculture stood at the least popular class in both
gender
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genders
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.
Additionally
.
Remaining
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The remaining
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groups show the opposite tendency
according to
the
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apply
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gender
.
Following
this
,
Interstingly
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Interestingly
, It is shown from the line
graph
that the number of total students who chose those remaining groups
roughly
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is roughly
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equal to each other. Looking at the
graph
more closely,It can be seen that The second most
poplular
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popular
subject
in
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for
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male
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males
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was engineering compared to only 1000
number of female
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females
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chose
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who chose
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this
class,
accounted
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accounting
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for the second least.
Furthermore
, The most
choisen
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chosen
subject except social science was
healthe
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healthy
health
in women,
while
It accounted for only around 800 in male.
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