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The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 table compares the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years, from 2006 to 2012.
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, Nokia was a dominant leader for most of the period until 2012, when Samsung experienced a significant upward trend to 396.5
million
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 in
sales
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.
Firstly
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, Samsung started at 117
million
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 in 2006 and grew every year. By 2012, it reached the top with 396.5
million
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. Apple started in 2007 with only 2.3
million
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sales
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, but its
sales
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 rose sharply to 135.8
million
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sales
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.
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, Nokia’s
sales
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 increased, at
first,
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reaching a high of 475
million
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 in 2008, but
then
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 dropped progressively to 335
million
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 by 2012. Motorola had a huge fall, plunging from 210
million
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 in 2006 to 28
million
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 in 2012. Ecrisson followed a similar path, dropping from 74
million
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 to 28
million
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. On the whole, the six-year period saw a major shift in the market. The older leading brands, Nokia and Motorola, experienced a large drop in
sales
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,
while
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 newer competitors like Samsung and Apple grew rapidly to dominate the market by 2012.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual sales
  • fluctuations
  • market saturation
  • technological advancements
  • consumer trends
  • brand dominance
  • growth trajectory
  • market share
  • innovations
  • peak sales
  • decline
  • stagnate
  • proliferate
  • exponential growth
  • market dynamics
  • forecast
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