You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the percentage of people visiting GYM once a month or more between 1984 to 2003. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the percentage of people visiting GYM once a month or more between 1984 to 2003.

Write at least 150 words
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The given chart provides data about the proportion of European residents
in
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different ages who often visited the gym between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the percentage of individuals going to the gym in 4
age
groups in Europe underwent an upward trend over the
years
.
In addition
, the figure of young adults participating in gyms is higher than that of middle-aged adults, especially, the
age
group
24-33, which is the
age
group
with the highest recorded data throughout the
years
1990 to 2010.
At
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the beginning, the figure of European citizens in the 18-23
age
group
who exercised frequently was 15%,
while
the number of people aged 24 to 33 was about 2% higher, at 17%. From 1990 to 1998, the proportion for the 18-23
age
range witnessed a continuous fluctuation when the initial number increased to approximately 18% in 1994 and
then
fell to 16% in 1998. In
the
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similar situation, the percentage of ages 24-33 rose from a starting point to 23% and dropped to 20%. After 1998, the amount of the 24-33
age
range surged sustainably and reached roughly 26% in 2010.
By contrast
, the number of individuals from 18 to 23
years
old experienced
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significant growth and peaked at 25% in 2006;
however
, it went down again to nearly 18% by 2010.
On the other hand
, gym goers in the 34-43 and 44-53
age
group
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reached 7% and 5% respectively, and over the following 4
years
of steadiness, both groups went up moderately until 1998. After that,
while
the figure of people in the 34-43
age
bracket witnessed a slight rise to 10% in 2010, the percentage of citizens who fell into the 44
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53
age
group
remained stable by 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • trend
  • gym attendance
  • frequency
  • increase/decrease
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • gender disparity
  • societal norms
  • lifestyle changes
  • fitness industry
  • patterns
  • economic factors
  • public health campaigns
  • technology advancements
  • accessibility
  • workout regimes
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