This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 4 Writing Task 1. The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 4 Writing Task 1. The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration demonstrates how
plastic
bottles
are recycled,which can
this
process help to reduce pollution and protect our planet and environment from
plastic
products.
Overall
, the cyclical process consists of a 9-stage and it begins with collecting
plastic
bottles
from people who throw them in the recycling garbage and
finally
facilitates products
different
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and different
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items made of the raw materials that came from
plastic
bottles
.
To begin
with,
plastic
bottles
are collected from a designated recycle bin and the trucks transfer them to a recycling factory. The factory’s workers start sorting the
plastic
bottles
and
then
they go through a compressing machine to get the air out and form them into blocks in order to crush them into small pieces. The
plastic
pieces are
subsequently
washed before they are placed in the producing
plastic
pellets. Following that, the
plastic
pellets are exposed to heat, which results in the formation of a raw material. From
this
, the raw materials are packaged before they are shipped to factories, they
then
use the raw materials to produce different products
such
as clothes,
plastic
bags, water
bottles
, … etc.
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