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“It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. Which is more important? Why? Write about 200-250 words to improve your opinions in this space”

#“it #“not #books #contrast #space”
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 vital role in the life of a human being.Some people assert that practical
knowledge
 is more worthwhile
while
 others believe that bookish
knowledge
 is more worthy.I partially concur with the first statement.I will explain both ideas in the
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Firstly
 ,Practical
knowledge
 is grasped by the mind easily and is retained for
longer
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 period of time as compared to the
theoratical
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theoretical
.
For instance
, a lot of countries have made
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practical
knowledge
 a part of
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academic life
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in order to understand and visually observe the
resuts
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results
what ever
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whatever
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 they are studying in the
books
this
give
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 them
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 better idea
how
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of how
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 actually things are working.
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 heated argument is that Practical
knowledge
enable
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enables
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the
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students to earn some money
in addition
 to the development of
skill
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skills
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.
For
example
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 the students who are working in
addtion
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addition
 to the university are likely independent from parents financially.
On the contrary
,
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another group
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 of
the
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people thinks that
books
 are more important.They think that you can not reach
to
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the final decision if you do not know the detailed background of the problem which
ostentially
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essentially
potentially
 comes from
books
.
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 the students in
lab
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 can not perform the experiment if they do not know what is the background of the topic and how to validate the results.
Secondly
,
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people believe
 that
books
 are only the source of
the
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knowledge
,
Although
 practical things are essential
but
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apprently
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apparently
 they are
drived
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derived
 from
books
 .In every walk of
life
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life,
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 practical things are first documented
then
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and then
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 implemented so
books
 are the origin
for example
 a doctor
study
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 for long hours before performing
a
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surgery the same is true for all other fields.
To conclude
 ,I think all forms of information are equally important but
also
 in order to apply something in the real world it is necessary to gather the information about it and to analyze it,so considering that fact I concur that
books
 are
main
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 source of
knowledge
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear main idea that reinforces your thesis statement. For example, separate the paragraph on earning money from skills to avoid disrupting the flow.
task achievement
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure clarity and conciseness. Reduce repetitive phrases, and improve word choice for better clarity and expression.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which bookend the main discussion effectively.
task achievement
Good attempt at providing contrasting viewpoints and a well-thought conclusion showcasing a reasoned opinion.

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